Turfing on Trains Feedback

Good
The music was on point.
Placeholders worked to show what we need and didn’t distract people from the story.
Music choices were appropriate.

Improvements
See more of an emphasis on the “family” aspect.
Explain why and how they got into “Turfing”.
Introduce the characters.
Work on the transition from color to black and white.
Work on Jasmine’s part since it seems “out of place” consider to either flesh out her part to make her apart of the story or just take her out if it doesn’t work.

Others Points to Think About
Music leads people to emotional place.
Consider the angle of seeing how the family is struggling to make a living.
Consider showing the difference between “street thugs” panhandling and artist dancing for a passion.