Critiques from our pre screenig
Interviews couldn’t were not understandable
50’s model and Vicky’s mom couldn’t understand
Add in and out a little later
Audio problems lower music
City college shot zoom in on what someone is wearing
Vicky doesn’t talk much about industry, address misconceptions, didn’t empathize with her- Francis
Beginning was focusing on negative
Music was too loud
Check where music cuts out, cut it out earlier
Fade out after montage
Cut out golden gate part?
Ending change to specific dates
Washing machine part cut shorter
Laundry to long
When she says here, put shot of bridge
Why did she peruse modeling here? Is she going to be more successful here?
Sense of structure
A bit light, entering tonight bit
Promotional piece for her
Great to see what people in the industry / agent to critique her
More info about her view on real modeling industry
First person on street is more of a joke, more minimal
Put vapid guy for the first person interview
Montage of industry
Showing not how true the industry is
Sweeping clip is favored transitions are a little to fast
Humor, change of direction
Variety in music
Main thing: points about the modeling industry has some messed up stuff, don’t avoid those things
When I ask the question then have her avoiding the question
Get opinion from agent
Self market yourself- nitty gritty stuff, what does she do to prepare for a show
Why does she want to be a model?
More sense of what she’s up against
Logo coming into title- what does it show? Explain?
Here are the First Critique notes.
Critique on- Behind The Catwalk rough cut
Camera work was good
Facts are good
Missing the connection from her modeling to how she feels. Vicky separated from the facts. Tell them her facts
Have some of the facts earlier on
Add how Vicky personally feels about the industry
Good intro, then don’t see how her story goes.
Maybe add an epilogue
Story about grandmother, get a pic of her when she was younger
What brought her into fashion, how she got into it
Tie info about industry to Vicky
Reshoot and ask the same questions for the better audio
Help the viewer with the perspective with the statistics with Vicky’s statistics
Bring it all back to her story
Offers lots of opinions
Acknowledging the statistics
Vicky- hers what I’m hoping to get out of my career- what I will be doing in 10 years
Average women height and weight- ABC, check around. The medium
Title safe for the text
Jerry- want to know more about Vicky
Take the off the street interviews and put them all in the beginning
Won’t believe that there are struggles
World of modeling into then have everything point to her. Ends have something she’s saying about the world of modeling
Hit on her story more to get stronger and stronger
Tomorrow- good audio, her open up about her life. Find out more about her grandma
Family history, get her on film of her doing other things besides modeling
Ex. Cooking breakfast
Good pic of the older model
On the Street Interviews:
What is the first thing that comes to your mind about American modeling?
What are some stereotypes about modeling?
Do you think models have to be smart?
What got you into modeling?
Why did you choose this career?
Who are some of your favorite models?
What model, if any, do you see as an inspiration to you?
Is it hard balancing school and modeling?
How do you deal with your flaws?
Vicky’s Mom Interview
What did you want your daughter to be originally?
How do you feel about your daughter modeling?
Are you worried about the negative side of modeling such as eating disorders and what not?
What do you do to be sure that your daughter doesn’t fall into these bad habits?
How important is it that she is receiving an education and pursuing modeling?
Are you proud of the progress that she has made and the hard work?
Here ya go guys!!
The beginning to our movie will be various interviews with people as they tell us their opinions on modeling. As we expected many of these people had negative things to say about the profession. It sets the stage for what models are up against in this world and is a nice way to introduce our model Vicky as we show her eating a burger with an interviewee claiming all models starve themselves.
We will end the film with wise and inspiring words from a former model we interviewed. She tells how it is a beautiful career which leads to many great opportunities. Along with the former model, Vicky’s mom offers words of encouragement for her daughter. Finally, there will be an epilogue of what Vicky is doing as of the end of our editing. We know she has a show coming up that is out of our timeline for shooting so that will be included.
Our approach to this film will be appealing visuals with elegantly composed shots coupled with uplifting music. Beautiful shots of the city where the story takes place will meet our character in her day to day life in its heart. Music will be ambient with acoustic instruments painting a picture of introverted calmness with a hint of excitement. We as filmmakers will be stay as far in the background as possible and try to capture things as they unfold; a pure look into the model’s life.