Footage was good
There was no space between some of your interview
2 second of transition between people
Still photos letter boxes on the side
Good use of external footage tom cruise animation
Story
Dojo/lake merrit
Not enough exposition to get you in the mood in it
Get sound bites set up what is so cool about this place the audience is left
The teachers voice is hard to understand a lot of reverb fix audio
All the dialogue with the video so many different/ clean up a little more
Worth getting sound bites from the sensei himself.
Audio is poorly recorded
Zoom- re say the important stuff
Cant get the audio putting subtitles-last resort
They like the woman/ what she was doing and why she was there aka Fei
Fei story driven
Priceless-part Fei
Get Fei in camera to get her to talk to her.
Barrier between the audience and film
Closer to the people closer shots
Dave- Introduction and people favorite part
Right wrong depiction.
Fei Fei
Obatta Sensei his the connection to the tradition
Audio
Thankyou for addressing the laziness
Jerry- Topic driven piece not a story
Get Fei to be interview a whole story around her
Get rid of all the other footage
Dave-From the piece- lineage whose your teacher and the lineage.
Get Fei to talk about the lineage
Elliot- Beginning student, this are the influences of my life. Talk about her talking about sensei and Mike talk about Obatta Infostructure
Elevated sense of superiority
Get active shooting move to feel the space part of the actual activity going on
Sound is important
Keeping the culture alive end of intro Link back to the story structure to keeping the culture alive.
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