First Critiques
Conflict
- Too positive
- Possibly get some shots post music
Recount possibly ivan’s story
- Show an arc of benefits; progress over time of benefits of music
Other notes
- Add more to explain what Alzheimer’s is (add info graphs)
- Too much lanni(also might want to mention the change Alzheimer has done to him
- Try to get people to do what they normally do?(Match b-roll better with a-roll)
- Provide evidence that music helps people with Alzheimer
- Looks like someone dropped the camera into the piano
- Shaky cuts
- Cut out “um…”s
- Musician use “they” a lot, which de humanize the alzheimer patients
Final Critique
Minor
- Unity in subbing Grayson
- Greg:music contrast intro vs piano
- Title threw gavan off
- Wrap up with same intro voice could be a nice touch
- They like the backdrops for the interviews
Major
Shanti: STORY?- Narration/begining:
A bit stiff
Not enough feels
Can cut it down(like after the end of the animation)
Gave away to much at first?
(replace all of it with footage of what Alzheimer’s people behave like)
Black and white pics of old people to add feelz- Piano sounds kinda flat playing so long. Wasn’t impressed
Nail it more on the emotional side
Replace with some old people singing- Make a new banner for names
- Waste time at some of the interviews scenes at the beginning (clean up)