Rough Cut Critique,

ROUGH CUT NOTES
10/08/15

The Alfista

  • • need more B-Roll over the interview footage, **for cutaways and shot changes, especially**
    —> will help put more emphasis
    • Story Development? pin-point on ONE aspect and build on that! build a story,
    —> GLENN OLIVEIRA’S IMPACT ON THE ALFA COMMUNITY <—
    • — “have people work on their own cars”
    • SHORTEN THE TALKING, cut more effectively
    ⁃ —> “Glenn is introduced @ 4:55 min mark of the documentary… way too long”
    –> introduce the main character, EARLIER and MORE EFFECTIVELY.
    • jump cuts of interview —> edit better? jump to other people, allow for a smoother transition between the talking,
    ⁃ —> comes through as VERY manipulative
    • more (but minimal) footage of the “history,”
    ⁃ —> find pictures, footage, vintage shots of, Glenn, his shop, Alfa’s racing,
    • build on community, and story, using B-Roll
  • IMPORTANT: SHOW THE STORY, build around a story, use B-roll, interview footage, audio, VOICE OVERS, to SUPPORT the STORY