Today’s Critiques (Ariel’s Notes)

Below are the analytical assessments from students and our instructors regarding second viewings of our documentary film, “Ceilingwards”. We thank you all for the constructive criticisms and we take it to heart and consideration.

  • “We need to identify the people talking either by name (Lower thirds, dialogue mentions it, etc) or formal interview footage which consists of them talking (identified with camera on faces). We know you don’t want talking heads, but in this case it would be helpful.” —Students
  • “Think about how to introduce Sarah and Lindsey into the story. There was confusion on who they were.” —Instructors and Students
  • “Peaking around the corner of the curtain was not working (may be a distraction). Too much red color.” —Student
  • “GoPro footage needs to be reworked as far as putting it in a place where it’s relevant to what is being said. (Don’t put it in there just because it looks cool…… which it does. It needs to have a reason of why the footage is there).” –Student
  • “Show faces so we can connect to who’s speaking!” —Student Again
  • “A strong sense of disconnect between the audience and the main focus (Lindsey and Sarah). Lots of talk of the injury, but no progression. They keep repeating things about the injury over and over again. Perhaps we need a background story of why this injury made such an impact on their lives (show footage of them in golden days; when they were the best at what they do; before the injury) for the audience to care.”—Student
  • “Audio needs reworking: Room tone/Ambience. Abrupt cuts in the audio was mentioned. Needs to be a lot smoother.” –Shantie
  • “Film is incomplete, due to unresolved material.”–Jerry
  • “Motion Graphics  would be helpful in understanding the injury better.”— Student and Instructors
  • “Keep in touch with us when you guys are having problems; I wish you had showed this to me early on before presenting” —Jerry
  • “The text used in the film may not have worked the way we wanted it to.” —Shantie
  • “I related to Sarah in that particular medium when she talks about how it was awful sitting out because she was injured and watching everyone else perform.” — Student
  • “Not sure if you all are trying to convey a depressing feel to the documentary or a hopeful one. How do you want us to feel when watching your documentary? I feel low spirited so far.” — Student
  • “Loved the positive shots of Sarah and Lindsey smiling and laughing together and of Sarah pretending to play guitar; conveyed good mood which I would like to see more of in order to get this out of the dumps.” — Student
  • “One of the things holding this film back is the continued fear of failing or the footage not being perfect as you foresaw. Don’t be afraid to fail at things. That’s a how you learn; through trial and error. If you don’t try things, you won’t see the magic in what you have and you won’t learn anything. Nothing’s perfect until you try. If you need help, suggestions, anything, call on us! We will help you!” — Intructors

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