Rough Cut Critique!

Bay Area Sliders

Story?
Little less negative space in footage.
More footage used from race.
Action
Description of longboard a little long.
Just describe the longboard, no comparison to Skateboard.
Use more of the footage from the previews.
Music is a little distracting.
PERSONAL CONNECTION
Why do they still longboard since its so dangerous?
Connect to Sinjin?
Less Sinjin.
Grabbed right away!
HOOK!
Exitement!
Bring back the sexy!” (More like the previews)
Educational?
Amp it up!
More of Cliff Coleman (Archival footage, stories from riders)
Massive Potential
Use footage to support story; if it doesn’t fit, get rid of it!
Music Integration
Good footage
Action Shots
Longboard Explanation (No Skateboard)
So much great footage!

Thank you to everyone who gave your input! We will use as much of it as we can!