Final Critique Notes

narration leading to hindus helped

longer pause after intro, into driving scene

ghostly moo, for mood (good idea)

audio for horns

great, hilarious

disconnect between whats being and whats being shown

polish drawings/new drawings

sequence and variety are nice but too quick, to much info make a slower pace

fix strobing effect on filters/ distracting

not all shots need old style filter

better ending, not leave on ‘you wouldn’t kill your mother?’

“you wouldn’t kill your mother?”, should stay
(recognize what audiences reaction is whether good or bad?)

make a trip out of his interview?

make sacrifices in film

fade barge sound into moo sound.

great audio

use contrast on blue psychic? (better interview)

Treasure Island Lady interview, in or out?
(use narration guy instead of lady)


Rough Cut Notes

  • Awesome Narration; writing, delivering
  • Ending dialogue (sounds different)
  • Island access, the reality that its hard to reach
  • Made something out of nothing
  • Good Interviews
  • Hindu works with the story
  • Pirates have eternal suffering
  • Cows REALLY are sacred
  • Another segment? → Feel more closure
  • Good Humor
  • Good Intro
  • Real Night Footage (reenactment)
  • Treasure Island lady talked too much (but informational)
  • Let phrases breath
  • Cloud Cow, dissolve
  • Draw in more detail for existing drawings
  • Cow drawing is more clean than other drawings
  • B-Roll doesn’t fit 100% (little things)
  • Audio dynamics (fix lows and highs)
  • Vegan’s input
  • Hindu segment teasing spirits?

Rough Cut Notes
Rough Cut Notes

Core Concept

The core concept of the documentary is to reveal to the audience the Urban Legend known as “The Phantom Cow of Yerba Buena Island.” One of our main goals is to highlight the idea that Urban Legends such as this one are ridiculous, but at the same time, they posses a sense of history and aesthetic that people can appreciate.

Interview Questions

What do you know about urban legends?

What do you know about the urban legend of The Phantom Cow of Yerba Buena Island?

(Have you ever seen or heard of the cow on the island?)

Do you believe this legend could be true?

Why do you think the cow haunts the island?

Do you think cows are vengeful?

How do you see cows after hearing about this legend?

Our Game Plan

  • Sleepy Dawg Productions
  • The Island of The Phantom Cow
  • an in-depth presentation of how certain people react to a particular urban legend, it being, “The Phantom Cow Of Yerba Buena Island.”
  • We are going to approach this topic by obtaining interviews from people of different professions and backgrounds in order to give the audience a full understanding of this particular Urban Legend.
  • The Urban Legend itself, the history and development of the island, the pirates’ lifestyle, the point of view of vegans, the spiritual aspect of cows in general, and essentially why urban legends exist.

My Questionnaire For The Vegans

Here is my questionnaire:

1. What inspires you to be involved in animal rights?

2. Do animals have emotions, and does that influence your decision to abstain from consuming their bodies and byproducts?

3. When did you first get involved with animal rights?

4. What is the Berkley Organization for Animal Advocacy?

5. When did you first join the Berkley Organization for Animal Advocacy?

6. What are some of the events your organization takes part in to spread awareness of your cause?

The second half of the interview would be related to the urban legend I my film is about and how it symbolically ties in with your organization’s principles.

7. Have you heard of the Urban Legend of “The Phantom Cow of Yerba Buena Island”?

(If they have not, I will brief them on the story)

8. Being involved with animal rights, do you think this story is symbolic in regards to how animals are treated today.?

9. Do you think a cow would mourn for its lost calf?

10. If you were starving on an island with a cow, what would you do?

11. If you lived peacefully with the cow, what would you do if pirates came to eat her calf?