Final Critique Notes

Here are the notes we received from our final critique:

  • – People could relate more to the added stories and situations of being bullied in the army
  • Missing the impact of the original ending quote from our rough cut
  • Good visuals that helped move the story along; that being said, they would like to see more personal photos and less stock footage
  • Themes that were present were Strength and a symbol of freedom
  • A possible change in the ending was to make it more inspirational, like “rising up from the ashes”
  • Break up long scenes of dialogue with photos or other media clips
  • work on pacing, let the film and moments breathe
  • have music play a more emotional aspect; almost another character to the film