– There’s a better sense of a story with a deeper sense of character. But the story is not a complete one. Need more from beginning to end. But the subject is appealing and honest

– green screen background threw people off and was distracting

– there’s the makings of a good story here; has good basics; and killer quotes — quote at the end really knocked the message home

– needs some attention to composition details

– news footage + interviews really help show the conflict, the character, and the change

– More of a personal connection with our subject; more photos while in service; photos of family; before and after photos. More supportive evidence