Rough Cut Critiques

  • Work on repeat footage
  • Add projects he has worked on
  • Add more footage of main character talking
  • Talk about the obstacles he had to overcome and his struggles
  • Talk about what he does and what he has achieved
  • Audience wants to see him create what he does
  • Framing needs fixing
  • Audience wants to see him engineering
  • Evidence of his credentials
  • Music to support the story
  • In one segment show or play the music he has produced
  • In the Intro show his achievements upfront
  • Walk audience into the world he is in
  • Imagine they don’t know anything about Aye-G
  • They want to see more of him maybe outside the studio
  • Need shots of him other than in the studio, exaggerate what he does
  • Audience liked the main character
  • The concept was pure and understandable
  • Nice collection of interviews
  • The interviewees and him talking about his sister works well
  • Music is well selected, but needs to be structured with the story